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Ficlet: Bloody Mary Coda

Title: Bloody Mary Coda
Author: hells_half_acre
Rating: G
Word Count: 477
Warnings: Spoilers for 1x05 (hardly a warning)
Disclaimer: This is a transformative work of fiction for entertainment purposes only.
A/N: Based off the discussion generated from a recent post of mine.

Summary: Dean didn’t think of any of those people, he didn’t.

They were only 50 miles outside of Toledo when Dean heard Sam take an ominous breath. He tightened his grip on the steering wheel and tried to pretend that he hadn’t been expecting it.

“Dean,” Sam began – Sam had always begun that way, even the almost four year absence hadn’t changed that habit. Dean could write a Sammy to English dictionary and most of the words would be varying intonations of his name, all meaning different things. In this case, it meant that Sam was going to ask him something that Dean wasn’t going to like.

“Yeah?” Dean replied, wanting to pre-emptively turn up the music, wishing they were listening to something a little heavier.

“Your eyes bled too,” Sam stated. It wasn’t phrased like a question, true, but Sam was waiting for an answer all the same.

“My eyes are fine, Sammy” Dean replied, knowing that wasn’t the question Sam was asking. He hoped Sam would drop it, but then, when had Sam ever dropped anything? Kid was like a dog with a bone – yet another thing that hadn’t changed about his little brother.

“But why?” Sam asked, “who’d you kill?”

Dean sighed and he didn’t think of that little boy who had died because Dean was five seconds late in rescuing him – if he had leapt that wall instead of going around it, if he had jimmied the lock just a little faster, if he had put the clues together a little quicker – maybe that kid would still be alive if Dean was better at his job. He didn’t think of that woman, who died because Dean couldn’t find the right lie to get her to leave the house, couldn’t figure out how to get the woman away from the poltergeist long enough for him to get rid of it. He didn’t think of that guy in that bar fight in Portland, that bastard of a guy who had picked a fight with Dean when he lost his money. Dean didn’t remember the horrible twisting of his stomach when he realized that in the heat of the moment he had brought that pool cue down too hard on that guy’s head. He didn’t think of how he had run away before anyone could confirm what Dean feared. His Dad had taught him better than that, his Dad had taught him how to be quick, how to lie well, how to take someone down without killing them. So, Dean didn’t think of any of those people, he didn’t.

“Sam,” Dean said instead, and maybe Sam could write his own dictionary too, he thought absently. “Bloody Mary was a cornered animal in the end, just like most everything we hunt. I think she would’ve made Mother Theresa’s eyes bleed if it meant she could escape us.”

“You think?” Sam asked.

“Yeah, I do” Dean replied.

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followingabdiel
Jan. 24th, 2010 03:30 am (UTC)
yay!
Short but nicely done, my friend--I especially like the bit about the Sammy to English dictionary based on the different intonations of Dean's name. It's so in line with the show--I mean, when you think about the sheer number of times Sam says "Dean" in all of the varying situational tones, it's actually pretty damn funny. LOL! Anyways, thanks for writing this, and for dropping me a line to let me know that you did! Nice job!

hells_half_acre
Jan. 24th, 2010 05:42 am (UTC)
Re: yay!
No problem! I realized after I posted that I might not be on your friends list.

Glad you liked it. I debated putting that dictionary bit in, but now I'm glad I did! One of the things I love about the show is how much of the communication is in tone or facial expression, and not so much the actual words - that's sort of hard to get across in fanfic though.
followingabdiel
Jan. 24th, 2010 03:33 am (UTC)
whoops, forgot
Oh, yeah--I forgot! I should have mentioned that I liked how there wasn't just one answer as to why Dean's eyes bled. I never even considered that Dean would think of more than one incident. And the distinctions between the incidents are pretty interesting. And I love the way you had Dean deflect Sam's question. Clever Dean.
hells_half_acre
Jan. 24th, 2010 05:44 am (UTC)
Re: whoops, forgot
Dean's a complex dude...relating to the post that sparked all this: One of the reasons I was disappointed that Kripke said there was a definite reason why Dean's eyes bled, was because I always thought that Dean is the type of guy to blame himself for EVERYTHING (further confirmed by 5x11), so if Bloody Mary worked off guilt - well, there would never just be one reason.
mara_snh
Jan. 24th, 2010 04:50 am (UTC)
I love the dysfunctional communication that is ironically perfectly functional for these guys. I also enjoyed the "translation dictionary" motif -- very sweet.
hells_half_acre
Jan. 24th, 2010 05:46 am (UTC)
Thanks! I'm glad you liked it! I'm a huge fan of dysfunctional communication. ;-)
borgmama1of5
Jan. 24th, 2010 05:47 am (UTC)
Dean could write a Sammy to English dictionary and most of the words would be varying intonations of his name, all meaning different things, like Chinese.

That is a brilliant line--absolutely in character and perfectly written!

Loved the whole thing!
hells_half_acre
Jan. 24th, 2010 06:49 am (UTC)
Thanks!! I really thought that was just a throw-away line, haha, shows what I know!
crushinator67
Jan. 24th, 2010 06:36 am (UTC)
I must say, I am glad that even though it is the middle of season 5 I am not the only one who still thinks about this! What makes it so much worse is that Kripke has actually confirmed that Dean's eyes bled in that episode because he has a secret about someone dying (it's in the season 1 official companion). This is a nice reveal, and I really enjoyed how he brushes Sam off--especially after all the crap he gave Sam earlier in the episode.
hells_half_acre
Jan. 24th, 2010 06:51 am (UTC)
Ha, yeah, that's actually why I wrote it. I just got the Season 1 Companion the other week. Up until I read it, my interpretation of Bloody Mary had been the same as the excuse Dean gives Sam in this piece. Then, suddenly, I had to re-evaluate. I doubt Kripke is ever going to reveal the real reason, damn him :-P

Thanks for reading!
auriliawestlake
Jan. 24th, 2010 07:47 am (UTC)
Fantabulous shorty, me hearty.

Now, if we could just get a good reason as to why Sam saw Jess at the end of that episode, most of the still unresolved questions from S1 could be answered.
hells_half_acre
Jan. 24th, 2010 08:14 am (UTC)
Haha, I doubt we'll ever get the answer to that. I'll chalk it up to Sam being momentarily insane with grief. :-P

Anyway, I'm glad you enjoyed my little ficlet.
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tahirire
Jan. 24th, 2010 01:34 pm (UTC)
YES THANK YOU.

I SWEAR Kripke said a looooong time ago that he was going to answer that question. I still have my fingers crossed. See? *holds up fingers*

I LOVE the Sam-to-English and Dean-to-English dictionary analogy. So true. Maybe we should write one, lol. ♥
hells_half_acre
Jan. 24th, 2010 08:39 pm (UTC)
He did indeed, but I have given up hope that he will. It'd be lovely for him to prove me wrong though!

Thanks for reading!
redrikki
Jan. 25th, 2010 03:50 am (UTC)
Dean could write a Sammy to English dictionary and most of the words would be varying intonations of his name, all meaning different things, like Chinese.

So perfectly them and their relationship. Now all he needs is a guide to bitch-faces.

I liked that the reason Dean's eyes bled was actually a bunch of reasons and the guilt he feels about them is so perfectly in character for him. Nice work.
hells_half_acre
Jan. 25th, 2010 04:29 am (UTC)
Thanks! I'm glad it was in character for you and you liked my little answer to the mystery :-)

The Sammy bitch-face is the Winchester version of sign language :-P
mymuseandi
Jan. 25th, 2010 03:01 pm (UTC)
I remember that discussion, and i'm thrilled you make a fic to go with it. It might be a rather valid reason, Dean blaming himself for practically everything that went wrong on his hunts, especially the ones that he had to work alone after Sam and John ditched him.

Short, sweet and to the point!
hells_half_acre
Jan. 25th, 2010 07:45 pm (UTC)
Thanks very much!
trystan830
Jan. 25th, 2010 04:13 pm (UTC)
oooh a very cool little ficlet. :)
hells_half_acre
Jan. 25th, 2010 07:45 pm (UTC)
Thank you!
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debbiel66
Jan. 30th, 2010 09:55 pm (UTC)
Really enjoyed this - thanks so much. Made me want to watch the episode again!
hells_half_acre
Jan. 30th, 2010 10:08 pm (UTC)
Thank you! :-)
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hells_half_acre
Mar. 31st, 2011 09:23 pm (UTC)
Thank you! :)
et_tu_lj
Aug. 22nd, 2011 03:34 pm (UTC)
Ooh, excellent. Such a finely developed guilt complex on our boy. *smishes*
hells_half_acre
Aug. 22nd, 2011 04:07 pm (UTC)
Thank you!
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hells_half_acre
May. 29th, 2012 04:25 am (UTC)
Thank you :)
shinybiancachu
Oct. 10th, 2015 02:30 pm (UTC)
Loved that Dean and Sam have dictionaries of the other's name. I also liked that Dean feels guilty from those he failed to save. Nice foreshawdoeing ( I think) for Dean' guilt in later seasons.
hells_half_acre
Oct. 10th, 2015 05:05 pm (UTC)
Thanks! :)
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