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7 Lines Challenge

So, everyone and their sister seems to have been tagged with this today, and I am no different! franztastisch tagged me and I would never want to disappoint franztastisch, who is awesome.

The tag-game is to share 7 lines from the 7th page of a WIP.

The only fanfic WIP I have at the moment is Part 3 of Purgatory, Prophets and Potions - so, consider this your un-betaed sneak peak at what is to come:

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Silence fell. Tense and frightening. Teddy couldn’t stop staring at Dean’s bloody knuckles. It was only when Nate spoke that Teddy looked away.

“Where are we going?”Nate asked, his voice somehow both soft and gentle, yet extremely loud in the silence of the car.

Sam turned to look at them, as though he had forgotten they were there. “Uh, your hotel – unless... I mean, we can drop you anywhere you like.”

“The hotel is fine,” Teddy found himself saying. Nate had wanted to go to that club, but Teddy couldn’t handle the thought of being in public now.
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Just to make things interesting though... the other WIP's I have are original fiction novels.

The first is a high-fantasy novel about an assassin who needs a new job. The only thing you have to know about this, really, is that it features a race of people who are without gender, which means that I can't use gendered pronouns for them (I do sometimes, but for character/plot reasons that are too complicated to explain here). So, for now, I'm using Spivak pronouns (the most audibly pleasing official gender-neutral pronouns IMO) which were developed in the 1970s but never caught on:

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“Hm,” Snick hummed, eir gaze still fixed on the white tents. “Tomorrow night, hide amongst the hedges outside his gate. Get there early and only if the wind is westerly. You’ll have twenty seconds, before the cab will be able to see you. Do not move until he latches the gate. He has dogs.”

“Thanks. Brilliant. You’re amazing,” Dove praised. “I owe you one.”

Snick waved eir hand, as though to knock the debt out of the air between them. “It’s my job.”

“You haven’t been my scout in a long time, Snick,” Dove shook his head.

Snick didn’t reply, eir gaze remained on activity across the square.

“Well, I’ll be off then, I’ve got a poisoning at dawn,” Dove said.

“Hm, good,” Snick muttered, and then, for really the first time since Dove arrived, ey seemed to give Dove eir full attention.

“Dove, make it look human.”
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The second original fic WIP will be recognizable to some from The Novel Project that I tried to undertake some years ago. I got the first draft done back then, but sadly the story just didn't work as well as I'd hope and I shelved the thing. Recently, I brought it out again and with the help of a friend started reworking the plot:

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“Thanks, boys,” the police officer said. “Here, let me give you my card,” She pulled down the visor and removed a business card from the pocket. “You can call me directly. I’m head of the missing persons in this town.”

“Now that’s a job,” Vincent laughed. He put his phone down on the roof of the car, as he slide off the hood completely and went over to take the card from her fingers. Seth slid off the hood then too. They really did have to get back to town. Seth had work the next day.

“It is,” the police officer said. “Now, am I going to have to stay to make sure you keep your word, or can I trust you to go on home now?”

“You can trust us,” Vincent said, then glanced down at her card. “Have a good evening Officer Portland.”

“You too,” Officer Portland smiled, and then rolled up her window and reversed back out onto the road, continuing her patrol.

“Well, that killed the mood,” Vincent sighed.
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Hope you enjoyed! :)

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franztastisch
Jun. 6th, 2015 03:19 pm (UTC)
*hugs all round*

I am so behind on PPP. :( Somehow, you post it at just the right time for it to get lost in amongst my flist and my RL stuff. So I think I shall save it up and read the rest all in one go. Also might serve to make me less confused by all the SPN references I no longer get. :P

I am also so glad you're going back to the Meanwhile Road. And making the forest more ~mystical. I am always a fan of that. :P
hells_half_acre
Jun. 6th, 2015 04:59 pm (UTC)
Yeah, it might be better to just read PPP all in one go when it's finished. Then you won't get as worried about the SPN stuff that you don't understand, because you'll see that it doesn't really matter. :P I mean, anything you need to know, I tend to explain, because I usually have at least one character in the scene who doesn't know what the heck is going on.

I am also so glad you're going back to the Meanwhile Road. And making the forest more ~mystical. I am always a fan of that. :P

Thanks! And yeah, even with me amping up the ~mystical-ness, I was looking at it the other day and thinking "this might still not be ~mystical enough" - but I'll save that for draft 4.
franztastisch
Jun. 6th, 2015 09:16 pm (UTC)
Haha yeah, having people not knowing whats going on in the story is super useful for me. :P

Add all the mysticism! As you may remember, the forest was my favourite part. And Seth. Seth was the deaf one right?
hells_half_acre
Jun. 6th, 2015 10:05 pm (UTC)
Jacob/Jay is the deaf one.

But I'm glad you like him! He's still going to be around. So is Seth - who isn't deaf, and Seth is going to be a little less passive this time around, which means that hopefully people can connect to him more - because Seth was always MY favourite, but no one seemed to understand his motivations and hated him. So, yeah, that's another thing I'm fixing.

franztastisch
Jun. 6th, 2015 10:40 pm (UTC)
Jacob! Yes, I liked him.

I can't remember Seth then. I remember June and Vincent - or at least, Vincent was the one thrown out of the plane right? - and then Jacob and Miranda Portland. And the forest and the bridge. And there was a little girl Jacob made friends with, right? Or maybe I made that up...
hells_half_acre
Jun. 7th, 2015 12:51 am (UTC)
Yeah, no one can remember Seth, because he ended up being super boring for everyone - even though I loved him. So, in the current draft, I'm giving him way more to do, so that HOPEFULLY people will connect with him as much as I do.

And yes, there was a little girl that Jacob made friends with - Vincent's sister, Rose.
franztastisch
Jun. 7th, 2015 09:02 pm (UTC)
Yay! I'm glad I remember stuff. :P

So what is Seth doing in this version? Or is it a little too difficult to explain?
hells_half_acre
Jun. 7th, 2015 09:41 pm (UTC)
In this version, Seth is trying to figure out what happened to Vincent, because he doesn't witness it this time... but the forest is kinda talking to him, though he doesn't realize it, and it sets him off in more of an active detective role, rather than the weird passive victim role that I gave him last time.
franztastisch
Jun. 7th, 2015 09:44 pm (UTC)
Cool! And here comes the ~mystical forest! Excellent. :D
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