Hell's Half Acre (hells_half_acre) wrote,
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Specific Feedback Request

Hello everyone who read my story "Sam Is..." on Tuesday (and those that didn't too)!

I have a question for you....

I'm not sure how many of you noticed, but I changed verb tenses at the end. It was intentional. So, now I'm wondering...

Poll #1645669 Verb Tense Change In My Story...

What did you think of the verb tense change at the end of my story?

I didn't even notice
11(68.8%)
I found it jarring and didn't like it
0(0.0%)
I thought it was an artistic choice - it still annoyed me
0(0.0%)
I thought it was an artistic choice - and I liked it
4(25.0%)
I thought it was cool
1(6.2%)

If you were going to give the story a different title, what would you call it?

The decision to change verb tenses at the end was actually one I made AS I POSTED. So, I'm still not sure whether I like the decision or not. Also, as you can see, I'm not sure I like the title either.

Don't worry about offending me - I have 34 comments on that story telling me how awesome it is, so I'm more than capable of taking a pinch of criticism along with all that praise ;)
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